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Hatters Castle
, boekbespreking #1 Jeroen Pruijsers 404


in the lowlands of scottland stood a building.
it was the castle of the family brodie , dad brodie was a very strict man , and he was the big
boss in and arround the house , he had also a realy big reputation in the village where they lived.
he was called james brodie.
he was very mad at his daughter mary , beacuse she was after six weeks not the best of her
class anymore , and his other daughter mary was fell in love with a boy, but father don't liked the boy ,
who was called denis , and he had forbid her to see denis
he also had a son , called mathew , who was going to sail to inda , cause his father want to make a man
of his boy. he would be away from home for five years , what his girlfriend called agnes don't like.
father brodie had a small hat shop , where mary had to work .
salesman perry said she looking ill , and said to her she have to visit a doctor.
the doctor said she was pregnant , ashe asked denis to mary her , cause the baby will come
already over five years.
denis went for a talk to father james brodie , to ask why mary don't may see him , then james
brodie called him names , and want to hit denis , but denis avade him , so james hitted the wall
very hardly , and had to go to a doctor.
mary was now not allowed toleave the house , so she can't meet denis.
after six weeks sitting home , she would to kill herself , because she daught denis was forgotten
her , but then she got a letter from denis.
he wrote that he had bought a cottage , and will take her tot here at newyearseve.
a few days after that , her mother saw she was pregnant , and said it to dad , she had to leave
the house immediately.
she would go to denis parent's house , and had to walk 3 miles , but she had to walk to a forest by
night , so she get lost.the birth was began , in the middle of a forest , and she walked to a cottage.
she was very tired , and a few minutes later , an older lady found her , and called a doctor
immediately.the farmer was taking them to the hospital.
denis , who don't know of everything was going on , died by a incidient by a train. mary was still
very ill , and her baby died already and the hole town konws about it , and brodies reputation was
ruined. his hat shopn was not running well , cause a gigantic hat shop was opened in the little town.
brodie received a letter from his son matt , that he came to home. mother , who feels very ill , but
don't can go to a doctor , cause their haven't money anymore likes that. mad came home and had
inmidelately a quarill with his dad , he was going out with his girlfriend said matt to his mum ,and lent
the last money , but he wasn't going out whit is girlfriend , cause the relationship was broken , ands he
spent the money by drink. he was very drunk , and he saw his father in the town , and he getted his
pistal and want to shoot his dad , but he missed.
mother was going to a doctor now , and the doctor said she had cancer and die within six months.
then , brodies had-shop was finaly closed. he was ruined.then their mum died , in only one week.
only two days later , father had found a new girl , called nancy , brodie has taken a new job , as clerk
by the shipyard. matt and nancy had promised to each other to go out an evening . but matt had aslo
a new job , on south america , and nancy ( the girlfriend of his father ) had decided she would go
with math.mary came back to the house , and nessie was very happy with that.may goes to dr
renwick , and told him to her father pushed nessie up to win a prize at school , she must learn every
day , but she don''t liked that. dr renwick had goes to her school , and told her teacher about
it. grierson , the concurrant of nessie had win the schoolexamination , and brodie wasn't very
happy whit that. nessie had hang herself , and now brodie hasn't anybody more , cause mary
was fell in love with dr renwick.



me spellingscontrole deed het ineens niet meer , dus als iemand kan helpen ...

[ik_ben_de_man]

Hatters Castle
boekbespreking #1 Jeroen Pruijsers 404


in the lowlands of Scotland stood a building. it was the castle of the family Brodie , dad Brodie was a very strict man , and he was the big boss in and around the house , he had also a really big reputation in the village where they lived. he was called James Brodie.
he was very mad at his daughter Mary , because she was after six weeks not the best of her class anymore , and his other daughter Mary was fell in love with a boy, but father don't liked the boy , who was called Denis , and he had forbid her to see Denis he also had a son , called Mathew , who was going to sail to India , cause his father want to make a man of his boy. he would be away from home for five years , what his girlfriend called Agnes don't like. father Brodie had a small hat shop , where Mary had to work .
salesman Perry said she looking ill , and said to her she have to visit a doctor.
the doctor said she was pregnant , as she asked Denis to Mary her , cause the baby will come already over five months .Denis went for a talk to father James Brodie , to ask why Mary don't may see him , then James Brodie called him names , and want to hit Denis , but Denis evade him , so James hit the wall very hardly , and had to go to a doctor.
Mary was now not allowed to leave the house , so she can't meet Denis. after six weeks sitting home , she would to kill herself , because she thought Denis was forgotten her , but then she got a letter from Denis. he wrote that he had bought a cottage , and will take her tot here at new years eve. a few days after that , her mother saw she was pregnant , and said it to dad , she had to leave the house immediately. she would go to Denis parent's house , and had to walk 3 miles , but she had to walk to a forest by
night , so she get lost. the birth was began , in the middle of a forest , and she walked to a cottage. she was very tired , and a few minutes later , an older lady found her , and called a doctor immediately. the farmer was taking them to the hospital. Denis , who don't know of everything was going on , died by a incident by a train. Mary was still
very ill , and her baby died already and the hole town knows about it , and Brodies reputation was ruined. his hat shop was not running well , cause a gigantic hat shop was opened in the little town. Brodie received a letter from his son matt , that he came to home. mother , who feels very ill , but don't can go to a doctor , cause their haven't money anymore likes that. mad came home and had immediately a quarrel with his dad , he was going out with his girlfriend said matt to his mum ,and lent the last money , but he wasn't going out whit is girlfriend , cause the relationship was broken , ands he spent the money by drink. he was very drunk , and he saw his father in the town , and he got his pistol and want to shoot his dad , but he missed. mother was going to a doctor now , and the doctor said she had cancer and die within six months. then , Brodies had-shop was finally closed. he was ruined. then their mum died , in only one week. only two days later , father had found a new girl , called Nancy , Brodie has taken a new job , as clerk
by the shipyard. matt and Nancy had promised to each other to go out an evening . but matt had also a new job , on south America , and Nancy ( the girlfriend of his father ) had decided she would go with math. Mary came back to the house , and Nessie was very happy with that. may goes to Dr Renwick , and told him to her father pushed Nessie up to win a prize at school , she must learn every day , but she don’t liked that. Dr Renwick had goes to her school , and told her teacher about it. Grierson , the concurrent of Nessie had win the school examination , and Brodie wasn't very happy whit that. Nessie had hang herself , and now Brodie hasn't anybody more , cause Mary was fell in love with Dr Renwick.


dit is hem , maar dan zonder spellingsfouten , effe op school gefikt. nu hoeven jullie alleen nog effe te cheken op grammaticale foutjes.

Op zich zit het grammaticaal zo beroerd niet in elkaar, maar de zinsopbouw is een beetje stram. Sommige zinnen moeten korter, andere juist langer. Een paar concrete voorbeelden:

It was the family Brodie's castle. Father Brodie was a very strict man, and he was the big boss in and around the house. He also had a really good reputation in the village where they lived. He was called James Brodie.

He was very mad at his daughter Mary because she wasn't the best of her class anymore after six weeks. His other daughter, Mary, had fallen in love with a boy, but father didn't like the boy, who was called Denis, and thus he had forbidden her to see him. He also had a son called Mathew, who was going to sail to India because his father wanted to make his boy become a man.

Ik ga niet het hele stuk verbeteren, maar dit zal je een aardig idee geven van wat er nog aan de rest van de tekst mankeert. Herschrijf het nog eens en laat het dan zien.

(Als we het trouwens helemaal voor je zouden verbeteren zou je het kunnen uitprinten en met de eer gaan strijken, dus dat doen we mooi niet )

Grammaticaal zit het juist wel beroerd in elkaar, maar ik ga het ook niet verbeteren, veel te veel werk.

[Setragasj]

ik ga het niet eens lezen.
het is veel te irritant gepost

It was the family Brodie's castle. Father Brodie was a very strict man, and he was the big boss in and around the house. He also had a really good reputation in the village where they lived. He was called James Brodie.

He was very mad at his daughter Mary because she wasn't the best of her class anymore after six weeks. His other daughter, Mary, had fallen in love with a boy, but father didn't like the boy, who was called Denis, and thus he had forbidden her to see him. He also had a son called Mathew, who was going to sail to India because his father wanted to make his boy become a man.

He would be away from home for five years, what his girlfriend, called Agnes, did't like. Father Brodie had a small shop, in which he sold hats, where Mary had to work.

Salesman Perry said she was looking ill, and told her to see a doctor. The doctor said she was pregnant, and she asked Denis to marry her, because the baby would be born in 5 months time.
Denis went for a talk with father James Brodie, to ask why Mary isn't allowed to see him.
Then James Brodie is cursing at Denis and he wants to hit him, but Denis avoided him, so James hit the wall very hard, and had to see a doctor.
Mary wasn't allowed to leave the house now, so she couldn't see Denis. After six weeks of sitting at home , she wanted to kill herself, because she thought Denis had forgotten all about her, but then she got a letter from Denis. He wrote that he had bought a cottage. And that he will take her to his cottage for new new years eve.

nu heb ik er geen zin meer in
kerl.. je engels is echt te erg.. sorry

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Originally posted by Instructio4
ik ga het niet eens lezen.
het is veel te irritant gepost

True... True...

jah het zit wel goed in elkaar maar het is wel lang, eigenlijk teveel om te lezen.