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Aan de Bar... Onder het genot van een denkbeeldig drankje kun je hier alles kwijt wat je nergens anders kwijt kunt. En het hoeft nergens over te gaan. Spammen en flamen is echter ook hier niet toegestaan! |
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9 March 2009, 23:34 | #1 |
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gedicht - the mist: with you
Omdat DKVTTZWN mijn dicht skills wilde zien.
Ik schrijf erg basic, je bent niet verplicht om het mooi te vinden, so here we go. THE MIST: WITH YOU I am running, moving as swift as the wind, Making my way to your home... I should never have said those words to you, How I disliked the way our love evolved, how it grew, Saying that I hated you and things even more foul, I have been cruel, I can see it clearly now.. You are my strength, Your laugh causes time to end, Finally this shattered mind slowly started to mend, Why on earth did I ever let you slip away, Now I am wandering alone, lost in the cold, I guess I deserved no better So strike me with the mist, shroud me in the fog, hit me with a flurry of down.. I took the time we had for granted, Being arrogant, ignoring you when you were offended, So you showed me the door, Not willing to share your life with me anymore, I never took the time to actually listen to you, Because it never appeared to be important, and there were to many other things to do, Always told you to shut up, that I did not care about the things you desire, And now you walked away, bleeding inside, throwing that thing we had into the fire.. You are my strength, Your laugh causes time to end, Finally this shattered mind slowly started to mend, Why on earth did I ever let you slip away, Now I am wandering alone, lost in the cold, I guess I deserved no better So strike me with the mist, shroud me in the fog, hit me with a flurry of down.. You are my answer to everything, my own solution, The reason I am living is because of this conviction, But in my own confusion, I pushed you away, calling what we had a big illusion, Was I out of my mind?! You are my strength, Your laugh causes time to end, Finally this shattered mind slowly started to mend, Why on earth did I ever let you slip away, Now I am wandering alone, lost in the cold, I guess I deserved no better So strike me with the mist, shroud me in the fog, hit me with a flurry of down.. I am making haste, Running through the forest that contains all the miracles we ever faced, Passing ancient trees, Fleeting past dark waters with hidden treasures, Rushing through mystic temples for long forgotten gods, All the dangers are worth it, now that I miss you my heart defrosted, The ghost of you keeps me going, making me stout-hearted.. You are my strength, Your laugh causes time to end, Finally this shattered mind slowly started to mend, Why on earth did I ever let you slip away, Now I am wandering alone, lost in the cold, I guess I deserved no better So strike me with the mist, shroud me in the fog, hit me with a flurry of down.. I hope misery can life without me as its company Because with you I can penetrate the mist of life, finally I can see, That what we have is almost to good to be true, And I will keep walking, sacrificing everything to be with you.. And the mist does not frighten me anymore, because your fire is inside of me, Illuminating the way I normally would not be able to see, I only need my heart, no need for my eyes.. You are my strength, Your laugh causes time to end, Finally this shattered mind slowly started to mend, Why on earth did I ever let you slip away, Now I am wandering alone, lost in the cold, I guess I deserved no better So strike me with the mist, shroud me in the fog, hit me with a flurry of down.. I am losing daylight but I cannot move any faster, My vigorous spirit is driving me forth, I am a slave and you are my master, But although I keep racing on the distance remains, But this quest will not be in vain, I will continue my journey to you on these deserted planes.. Its all worth it, I can see it now, the words of my heart have never been so true, I would do anything, just to be with you.. You are my strength, Your laugh causes time to end, Finally this shattered mind slowly starts to mend, I will never let you slip away again...
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9 March 2009, 23:52 | #2 |
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Érrug lang, maar dit is briljant... Ik dacht dat het cliché werd, maar WTF...dit is geweldig. Goed man!
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9 March 2009, 23:56 | #3 |
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tis maar wat je zelf vindt.
zelf vind ik mijn werk namelijk wel cliché Teveel geblaat over pijn liefde en haat
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10 March 2009, 08:56 | #4 |
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Een goed uitgevoerd cliché kan ineens heel goed worden.
Wie is de volgende jongens? |
10 March 2009, 14:03 | #5 |
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Ik vind hem niet cliché.
Erg goed.
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10 March 2009, 14:53 | #6 |
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Nice hoor.
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10 March 2009, 15:20 | #7 |
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wtf?! ik zou dit echt niet kunnen,.... kan ook aan mij liggen.
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10 March 2009, 15:21 | #8 |
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Dat ligt gewoon aan jou
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10 March 2009, 15:23 | #9 |
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dus jij kan het wel? kan niet wachten om hem te lezen.
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10 March 2009, 15:23 | #10 |
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Reken d'r maar niet op dat hij het hier post.
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10 March 2009, 17:25 | #11 |
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Ik ga ff voor tl;dr.
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10 March 2009, 18:32 | #12 |
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Deed ik gisteren ook.
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10 March 2009, 18:58 | #13 |
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Het is heel erg persoonlijk, althans, zo lijkt het. Dat vind ik mooi. Cliché vind ik het niet. Over liefde schrijven is niet per se cliché, als je het goed kan. En dat kan je. Mooi geschreven. Hulde.
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10 March 2009, 22:23 | #14 |
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dank
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